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There's a monster in your kitchen!

I was living in Canada away from my friends and family. One night, i was very tired. I was lying in front of the TV watching an horror movie. I was scared by the scary scenes in the movie. suddenly, I heard a voice in the bedroom and I was so scared that I couldn't move. I was starring toward the bedroom and saw a very big and scary creature which looked like an alligator, with a big mouth and terrible eyes. It came toward me and tried to bite me. I ran toward the entrance room, tried to ran away but it caught my pant and throw me away. suddenly, I wake up and give a sigh of release.
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Patrick's answer is good and has a great explanation about the minor mistakes. I had a few different suggestions too, though: I was living in Canada away from my friends and family. One night, I was very tired. I was lying in front of the TV watching a horror movie. I was scared by the scary scenes in the movie. Suddenly, I heard a voice in the bedroom and I was so scared that I couldn't move. I was staring off toward the bedroom and saw a very big and scary creature which looked like an alligator, with a big mouth and terrible eyes. It came toward me and tried to bite me. I ran toward the entrance room to try and run away, but it caught my pants and threw me aside. Suddenly, I woke up and gave a huge sigh of relief.

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