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There's a monster in your kitchen!

I was living in Canada away from my friends and family. One night, i was very tired. I was lying in front of the TV watching an horror movie. I was scared by the scary scenes in the movie. suddenly, I heard a voice in the bedroom and I was so scared that I couldn't move. I was starring toward the bedroom and saw a very big and scary creature which looked like an alligator, with a big mouth and terrible eyes. It came toward me and tried to bite me. I ran toward the entrance room, tried to ran away but it caught my pant and throw me away. suddenly, I wake up and give a sigh of release.
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Nice work with the grammar. I made a few correctes to your grammar, punctuation and spelling. Corrections are noted in (parentheses). I was living in Canada away from my friends and family. One night, (I) was very tired. I was lying in front of the TV watching (a) horror movie. I was scared by the scary scenes in the movie. (S)uddenly, I heard a voice in the bedroom and I was so scared that I couldn't move. I was (staring) toward the bedroom and saw a very big and scary creature (that) looked like an alligator, with a big mouth and terrible eyes. It came toward me and tried to bite me. I ran toward the entrance room, tried to (run) away but it caught my (pants) and (threw) me away. (S)uddenly, I (woke) up and (gave) a sigh of release. A few of the mistakes you made are mistakes even that native English speakers make when writing. You mixed up "a" and "an" which is very common and can be difficult to master. "an" is used before a word the starts with a vowel (a, e, i, o, u) and "a" is used before words that do not start with a vowel. Here are some examples: an apple, an itchy scalp, an elephant VS a horror movie, a bean, a baked potato. Don't worry if you forget though, because you will ALWAYS be understood. You also say "I tried to ran away but...". Since you already let us know that you were in the past tense with "tried", there is no need to make "run" into the past tense as well. I is simply "I tried to run away but...".

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